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    dots Submission Name: Lost Eruditedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 942
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    Bytes: 641



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       I have no future.


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    dotsLost Eruditedots
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    Exiled from myself.
    Who am I?
    I'm not who I thought I was.
    Who's that in the mirror?
    Reflecting a stranger at me.
    Whose eyes pierce through me?
    I'm future-less yet enlightened.
    Why do I not have a future?
    I bring myself down.
    I dare not wash the dirt from my face.
    Tears creating mud upon my cheeks.
    Mud makes me who I am today.
    I learn from my mistakes, it's my gift.
    How can you know me without seeing me unclean?
    Educate you in my dirty secrets.
    But how can I teach of myself
    When I dare not even know me?




    Submitted on 2004-03-13 00:22:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, emotions being poured out into this piece is awesome! it gives the reader something to reflect on, while they are reading it, and after they are done reading it. i like the feeling of, coming into reading a work with questions, and leaving with the questions answered but a new set of them come into play.. and here that did it!.. excellent way to make ur words flow!.. great work
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot. It reminds me of a couple of lines from "The Bends" by Radiohead. I like how it ends in doubt although the subject is erudite. This is very good indeed although you do have a minor typo, and tell me if this offends you, but you left the "h" off of wash.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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