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    dots Submission Name: To Siegfried Sassoondots
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    Author: greensnake
    ASL Info:    60/female/ N.C.
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 770/691/75
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       No one ever wrote better poems about war than Siegfried Sassoon, but I still have to try at times to let the feelings out.


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    dotsTo Siegfried Sassoondots
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    "I knew a simple soldier boy
    Who grinned at life in empty joy."
    And now we send his great grandsons
    To face the hell of knives and guns.

    We send our daughters and our sons
    Across the world with their own guns.
    There they'll kill not knowing why,
    Hoping only not to die.

    And every drop of blood that's shed
    Falls down upon some mother's head.
    And every tear that's shed in pain
    Wets the graves with blood and rain.




    Submitted on 2004-11-08 19:07:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW. you are an exquised women and writer. i am giving this a rating of 5/5. if you would take a look at my pieces and comment on them i would be very honnored. :)
    xoxoxo
    Reeses
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      Lynne now I see your forte is rhyme and reason which I just don't have talent or the patients to do! I don't see you comprosing the context with your rhyming and that is the ultimate goal right? This poem voice a sentiment that many American parents feel and have faced. Great work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great write, Lynn. The last verse is stunning and I love the use of simple language, it makes it so memorable. With work like this the reader can sink right into the rhyme and has problem remembering.
    Not only that, it rings true, thanks for sharing.
    peace and love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a truely touching poem. It is perfect, I like the theme of age from a young slodier boy to great grandchildren and mothers.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by xdollpartsx | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful, and insightful. I beginning to wonder how much military runs in your family liniage. thank you for a beautiful piece and for thinking about the troops. Bless you
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      Well well. I'll agree with Raksha on the fact that this piece is very dramatic. But I do like it. Quite a bit actually. I'll also agree with Raksha corrections as well. But nonetheless a great poem with a great concept...much love to ya.
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      This is strange. I have had a recent (yesterday)disagreement with another member of this group about his feelings on war. And today this is the second poem that I've read that reaffirms my position. There is no glory in war, only death and suffering, death and suffering of so many innocents.
    As usual a great write, (Iknew ) could be easily fixed. You have painted a geat picture and only scratched the surface of my feelings on this issue.
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]
      wow-very dramatic-couple writing errors though-"To face the hell of knife and gun."-I feel like that line should be written with Knivies and guns because theres more than one-but other than that I was moved by this piece.Great Job-
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by Raksha | [ Reply to This ]


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