Lynne now I see your forte is rhyme and reason which I just don't have talent or the patients to do! I don't see you comprosing the context with your rhyming and that is the ultimate goal right? This poem voice a sentiment that many American parents feel and have faced. Great work.
This is a great write, Lynn. The last verse is stunning and I love the use of simple language, it makes it so memorable. With work like this the reader can sink right into the rhyme and has problem remembering. Not only that, it rings true, thanks for sharing. peace and love,
Well well. I'll agree with Raksha on the fact that this piece is very dramatic. But I do like it. Quite a bit actually. I'll also agree with Raksha corrections as well. But nonetheless a great poem with a great concept...much love to ya.
This is strange. I have had a recent (yesterday)disagreement with another member of this group about his feelings on war. And today this is the second poem that I've read that reaffirms my position. There is no glory in war, only death and suffering, death and suffering of so many innocents. As usual a great write, (Iknew ) could be easily fixed. You have painted a geat picture and only scratched the surface of my feelings on this issue.
wow-very dramatic-couple writing errors though-"To face the hell of knife and gun."-I feel like that line should be written with Knivies and guns because theres more than one-but other than that I was moved by this piece.Great Job-