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    dots Submission Name: A Shadowdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Shadowdots
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    I am fixated
    on a runaway shadow
    disappearing down a manhole,
    a weary Saturday vision.
    My madness beckons.
    Sleep is a lonely dream,
    a fleeting vision,
    sandwiched between
    thoughts of you.




    Submitted on 2004-03-13 04:19:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Amy,
    Once again you packed a lot into a short write. Nice job of getting circular thought that always winds up with what your trying to forget.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... this was very pretty and I liked it. It was a good length and very explanitory.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh another nice short piece packed with emotion and imagery... shows frustration and longing and sleeplessness... great work keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      great effect you achieved there. i really like the way you've played with simple words to achieve an effect that is definitely melancholy; i found it hard to breathe... great write
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I keep pitching in on top of you!
    Lonely and tired thoughts Amy - and you can't let go.
    A heady brew well articulated.
    It has a desolate feel to it...
    Hasta,
    K
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]


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