[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: A Shadowdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 257


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsA Shadowdots

    I am fixated
    on a runaway shadow
    disappearing down a manhole,
    a weary Saturday vision.
    My madness beckons.
    Sleep is a lonely dream,
    a fleeting vision,
    sandwiched between
    thoughts of you.

    Submitted on 2004-03-13 04:19:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
    Once again you packed a lot into a short write. Nice job of getting circular thought that always winds up with what your trying to forget.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... this was very pretty and I liked it. It was a good length and very explanitory.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh another nice short piece packed with emotion and imagery... shows frustration and longing and sleeplessness... great work keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      great effect you achieved there. i really like the way you've played with simple words to achieve an effect that is definitely melancholy; i found it hard to breathe... great write
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I keep pitching in on top of you!
    Lonely and tired thoughts Amy - and you can't let go.
    A heady brew well articulated.
    It has a desolate feel to it...
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    written by Daniel Barlow
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Push written by JanePlane
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Whiteout written by layDsayD




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]