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Submission Name: Dark Insights dots

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Author:	sweet-fire
ASL Info:	21/f/ky
Elite Ratio:	3.8 - 296/279/42
Words:	89

Class/Type:	Poetry/Alone
Total Views:	346
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	651

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um...this is really hard to explain...when i wrote it -it was meant to be about some1 who divides herself from the world-shes confused about what she wants...but u can get alot from it so take it as you may...

Dark Insights dots

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Dark insights of minds deepest fears
pitches forward, lets loose the tears.

Kicking and ripping at the surface.
Loudly wondering, what is the purpose?

Looking, searching deep within.
Nothing there, where has it been?

Openly closed to the world outside.
Laughs and stares help to divide.

Caring about others, yet really not.
Cold and dark, suddenly turns hot.

Scared and yeilding to shadows of past.
Running and spinning, falling so fast.

Screaming for help, anyone at all.
Silence still looms, drowning the call.

Submitted on 2004-11-09 10:07:16 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey..i reall ylike it...it says a lot...i dont think ive ever seen this one...thats weird cuz you've shown me a lot of em...how's that job?? did ya get it?
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by alma-perdida | [ Reply to This ]
  its good great job i think we all feel this way at times more than others but still we cant give up not yet anyways so keep them comeing i enjoying read your stuff
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by palin_white | [ Reply to This ]
  Caring about others, yet really not.
Cold and dark, suddenly turns hot.

loved this part. made me think about myself and i viewed things.

hmm. seemed depressing to me. alone is pretty depressing so i guess its the same. hmm. sorry for being so choppy. i basically loved it.
| Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
  i really enjoyed reading this...it reminded me kinda of a woman who was trying to rip a straight jacket off while at a insane institute...dont know really why...i didnt get the take on cutting but yea killing yourself or hurting yourself on the inside is what i got from this ...very nice write...im looking forward to reading more of your stuff

Rhaine
| Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this poem. You have good rhyming but I'm kindof unsure of the meaning... it could just me though becuse I'm sick and half bottle of robitussin really messes you up a bit! I owuld still like to see you try the whole not rhyming thing though. Let me know if you do cause I'll really wanna read it.
| Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
  I have struggled with abuse and self-injury, and when I read this poem it reminded me of the hate blackened void from which I have come. The lines "Scared and yeilding to shadows of past./ Running and spinning, falling so fast." They return to me the feelings I had, of being out of control, of being imprisoned, of running away only to find that in the end I was right back where I started. I think this is a wonderful poem.
| Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by Dark_Dancer | [ Reply to This ]
  oh, very nice! Imma add it to faves. Here is my take on it:

This person, dead on the inside b-cuz of the actions of others. Just realizing that there is nothing there, scared alone and frightened to feel that way. Only caring about ppl bcuz you feel it the right thing to do, not bcuz you actually care, cuz you cant show emotion. Looking for what you lost, your soul within, but cant find it. Openly shut off from the world, not hiding the fact that you are dead, any casual passer by can tell. Yeilding for shadows of the past cuz thats where your emotions lie, your memories, feelings that no longer have a hold on you...

Ooh, i really liked it! Sorry for such a long comment, but it was such a great poem! I think its your best one yet:)

->Dark
| Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
  Thats a really good poem. It does show confusion and is the way alot of people feel about things. you should continue you seem to have good stuff.
| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by sammute naru | [ Reply to This ]

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