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    dots Submission Name: Why I hate youdots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    dotsWhy I hate youdots
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    I hate your memorable smile,
    I despise the way you look.
    When I see you I want to hurt you,
    and take back what you took.
    I hate your perfect eyes,
    the void is just too hard to bare.
    Your fucking perfect gaze,
    your ever intimidating stare.
    I hate the smell you leave behind,
    the smell which reminds me of you.
    A breath of gutwrenching pain,
    slices me through and through.
    I hate your suspiciously soft hands,
    and how they feel to touch.
    The power to destroy my fucking life,
    one touch was just too much.

    I hate you for turning me into a pawn,
    an accessory for you to use.
    I hate you for exposing my weaknesses,
    was i just that easy to abuse?
    I hate you for leaving me scard,
    self loathing and emotionally dead.
    I hate you for tormenting me endlessly,
    bitch stole the key to my head.
    I hate you for making me feel like this,
    enraged and full of spite.
    I hate you for my endless suffering,
    and the enternity which has become this night.
    I hate you for giving me confidence,
    window panes of false hope.
    I hate you for smashing it away,
    and leaving me with the shattered pieces to cope.

    Most of all,
    I hate you for making me wish we hadn't met,
    I hate you for making me love you,
    a love too disfigured to set.




    Submitted on 2004-11-09 18:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is by all means my favourite piece of yours... I feel as though I can relate to this poem..

    ''Most of all,
    I hate you for making me wish we hadn't met,
    I hate you for making me love you,
    a love too disfigured to set.''

    For me, this ending makes the poem complete.
    ..
    This is an amazing piece, that I wont forget anytime soon.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Heartless | [ Reply to This ]
      what can i say this last one is your best one yet
    the symmetry was perfect your getting better
    and your dedication to detail is wonderful
    keep writing and keep practice good grammer
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate you for my endless suffering,
    and the enternity which has become this night.
    I hate you for giving me confidence,
    window panes of false hope.
    I hate you for smashing it away,
    and leaving me with the shattered pieces to cope.

    Most of all,
    I hate you for making me wish we hadn't met,
    I hate you for making me love you,
    a love too disfigured to set.

    see? now I can work on some comments for you since you started commenting...good job first off...allow me to also say that the lines that I posted I enjoy reading...I think your stuff flowed together well and also that is was clever how you ended it...I liked how you can love someone so much that you hate them for letting them put you through so much torment...gradulations on writing a good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      I meant to say "you can't hate someone you don't love."

    In my opinion that's true. Hate is the complete opposite of love. It's a very strong emotion.

    I think you can loathe someone; despise someone; be frustrated with someone. But I don't think you can hate them without caring for them in some way or another.
    | Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting piece here. You can definately sense the anger, which is obvious by the title. ;)

    I hate the smell you leave behind,
    the smell which reminds me of you.

    You say you hate it, at the same time it reminds you of them. I'm going to have to go out on a limb here and say you definately have some feelings for this person. ;) You can't someone you don't love.

    You kept to the rhyme scheme pretty well, but I hate when vocabulary gets sacrificed to make a rhyme with a word like "you."

    Break the rhyme, lay out your feelings! :)

    Nice one though. You definately got your mood accross.
    | Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]


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