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    dots Submission Name: The Cat Who Painted Autumndots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       I'm dedicating this to magnicat and pei_kathryn because they both love kitties and autumn. This was inspired by reading pei_kathryn's "Autumn Cloak" and seeing the picture above it. Here's a link to her poem: http://www.eliteskills.com/z/31725
    Let me know if the "edible colors" don't work. I'm also not sure about making it a myth (It wasn't originally written that way). If it doesn't work, let me know.


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    dotsThe Cat Who Painted Autumndots
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    Autumn is a calico cat
    freshly painted by the gods
    wearing her bright patches
    prancing through the trees
    leaving colours behind
    her beautiful calling cards
    catnaps of cinnamon rest
    beside paw licks of apple yellow.
    Back arches of pumpkin
    are sprinkled amongst
    purrs of cranberry,
    and the remaining green
    comes from a ball of yarn
    she furiously unwinds
    while her masters sleep.




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      It works - everything. I like this bringing to life autumn through a playful cat. Makes me feel all warm and fuzzy about cats and autumn.
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      so fall, so cute....so accurate...fall is like a calico cat....a tumble of these colors...

    and it sneaks in quietly..but leaves us scratching our heads waiting for winter.

    and we sleep while the seasons change.
    | Posted on 2011-09-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery and the unique idea of a calico cat representing autumn. Good job!

    Peace V

    Ren
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      I would have put falling colours; leaving her beautiful... as a play on fall being autumn. Besides that I really loved the imagery.

    This section
    Catnaps of cinnamon rest
    Beside paw licks of apple yellow
    Back arches of pumpkin
    Are sprinkled amongst
    Purrs of cranberry
    And the remaining green
    Comes from a ball of yarn
    She furiously unwinds
    While her masters sleep
    Worked best for me. i loved the play with colour. Made it magical...wondrous
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so... vivid. All those colors and the mood... the idea with a cat is perfect, it just fits here perfectly! Actually I'm quite amazed, cause it made me fell so... oh... looking for a fine word... it's so intimate, peaceful and so... soft(?). And I love autumn, and I love cats, and the only sensible thing I can say is: great piece, Amy!
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      you were right i would like this poem it is very artistic in a sort you are very talented. THe way you used personifcation about the cat was what i thought was the best. why did you use a cat though?
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by doom_gloomgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece. I'm allergic to cats and they love me. I can't touch them or my eyes sting and get all gross. = ( autumn is my favorite season and I like the way you Felineified is.
    thanks for this beautiful offering. What edible colors?
    peace
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      lots of just... lickable energy and metaphors in this piece. i really enjoyed watching the cat prance around the forest with leaves falling on her back... a beautiful image portrayed by this piece... I wouldn't change a thing. I absolutely love 'purrs of cranberry'... creates such an image.
    | Posted on 2004-11-12 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I keep having this vision of a painting for this piece. The cat is sitting licking his paw clean at the right side bottom of the page, behind him is autumns forest across the page. Spills, drips and kitty paw prints are randomly scattered about the page. Just had to share this. nan
    | Posted on 2004-11-12 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice. I love kitties and autumn too. Love how the patches were painted by the Gods. Love how the colors are all autumn foody. Very creative how you made the last ounces of summer are the ball of yarn...as if the kitty IS autumn shoving out the green. Another very creative piece...I think my kitty is winter...he's fat and fluffy and snow white...loves to be lazy and cozy by the fire...
    | Posted on 2004-11-11 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really a stroke of genius. The idea is truly inventive and the crafty word play brightens the whole scene.
    "Leaving colors behind", " beautiful calling cards", "back arches of pumpkin", "purrs of cranberry"
    The last four lines are so sweet. This piece is littered
    with purrfect images, the sum of the parts yeilds a painting done as as well as that cat's.http://www.eliteskills.com/smile.gif nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes the edible colors work great in this piece. I enjoyed how you added the 'purs' or 'catnaps' in with the colors. That makes it all the more enjoyable to read. I love Autumn and you've done it, and cats, a world of justice. Good job. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      that's so sweet and refreshing. now I desperately want autumn back (here it's snowing/raining again). you have great visuals ("cinnamon rest", "apple yellow", "Purrs of cranberry", etc.). the edible colors work very well. no problem with that. and I really like cats, too. I miss my two ones at home.
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      what a refreshing idea - cats are not my favorite creatures, but that's more due to my misfortune of only meeting felines with extremely bad attitudes and tendencies to claw. still here i would wish for a cat like this, just to watch the colors go by. so a fave. =]

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      I have no idea what a Calico cat is but the poem can't not do them justice. The cat that painted autumn, it's a fabulous concept and one that reminds me of Dr. Seuss for some reason. 'Catnaps of cinnamon rest' it's so pretty. I think I love this line specifically because cinnamon...*sigh*...it's the best thing in the world to me. God made the cat, the cat made Autumn...it's all good.
    -AC
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by StarAcabar | [ Reply to This ]
      that is just adorable, Amy! calico cats are so pretty, and the way you compare them to Autum is just beautiful. thanks for the dedication, too. this'll go on my favorites list for sure! very creative and unique of you, as usual! there is a book called "Cats That Paint" that is hysterical, really. i'll have to find you a copy. this is just too cute!
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the edible colors. I also like how you have the gods painting the cat, so I wonder if the title wouldn't also work as
    The Cat that Autumn Painted?
    later,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      Reminds me of our cat [excpet for the yarn thing-we don't have yarn]. anyway, a nice piece. good and strong imagery. good work. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this piece. I had not idea how the autumn/cat connection was going to work, but it came out perfectly. Truly beautiful. Thanx for your words.
    -Jimma-
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by Jimma | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!
    AWWWWWWWWWWWW!

    Ah that's lovely, and I love the edible colours! My cat Jet just had kittens ten days ago, Magni, Malachi and Mim. They've just opened their eyes and unbuttoned their ears... so sweeeeet!

    And I think this is great... I love cinnamon and apple yellow... the whole thing works wonderfully for me. Cat and Kathryn will love it. No changes here fore me... well done :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]


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