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    dots Submission Name: Black Halodots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1044
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    dotsBlack Halodots

    Standing in the dark light,
    Burning through my bones.
    Lighting up my face,
    Mist of lost tones.
    Looking for myself,
    Hue-less aura trapped on the stage.
    Found trust in nothing else,
    Here I am
    Now, take me away.
    Words from my mouth stream
    Visions of the things I dream
    Breathing in wicker air
    Fate I create here,
    Empty canvas
    I paint Images
    Re-coloring the tainted
    The truth I scream
    Makes you think
    Black Halo,
    Hovers over my head
    Micro-phone rattling out my thoughts,
    Jade is my expression.
    Watching the lighters create
    Stars in front of me.
    Enticing lyrics easing none.
    Words from my mouth stream
    Visions of the things I dream
    Breathing in wicker air
    Fate I created here,
    Empty canvas
    I paint
    Images I re-color
    All that is tainted
    The truth I scream
    Makes you think
    Black Halo,
    Hovers over my head
    Follow the charred light to me,
    Your saint.

    Submitted on 2004-03-13 14:44:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww... the darkness of this piece leaves my emotions in awe.... while the pictures continue to flow, my mouth can't explain the deepness i felt from this piece!.. would love to know what u were listening to while u were writing, or maybe u just made it sound like something else... i donno... excellent piece.. another retired to FAVs
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Great imagery.. most of the time there is a difference between commenting on lyrics and poetry... not in this case however...great dark write... goth..? keep em coming
    | Posted on 2004-03-14 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the dark but beautiful imagery, to me, all of your lyrics read like poetry.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Good lyrics for something heavy I think, but the words 'wicker' and 'untaint' seem strange to me (but then that may just be me). What kind of stuff are you playing?
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]

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