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    dots Submission Name: Human flawsdots

    Author: shepj
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 17/25/5
    Words: 623
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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       I know this isn't a poem, but I feel that since many people write and read here I'd post it. I'm turning 14 in a few days so think of the age before you type your reviews please. If you have any suggestions on what to write about please tell me. I do have poetry to post also, but I wanted to put this here first.

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    dotsHuman flawsdots

    This isn't really a poem it is just a piece of writing I did a little while ago but found that I liked so I'll add it.

    Dear Readers,
    as you know, we live on Earth. Once, in the beginning a land of paradise... now an immense graveyard. The life span of a human is too short to make mistakes. But of course, to error is only human. Live your dreams not someone else's. If you want something bad enough and you don't give up- as hard as that may be- eventually your dreams should come true. This process takes time and may seem impossible, but in the end it just may be worth it.
    Like I said, life is short, so just think of what you're doing if you look down on someone or make fun of someone. No matter how perfect you may think you are, or how perfect everyone else thinks you are... you aren't. I'm not trying to put anyone down who thinks that they are perfect or anything, but I didn't say that you wern't the best, or very good at many things you do, I simply said no one is perfect. I'm also not saying you did the worst thing in the world by putting someone down either, unfortunately I have too. But next time you go to say something to someone just think of how you feel, or how you would when someone puts you down. What I'm trying to say is, watch what you say to people.
    One reason I say life is short is because one-hundred years isn't all that long if you consider it. What bothers me is, so many people make their lives shorter by suicide, others are killed by violence, and some just come to their time. Suicide is a terrible thing, some people commit suicide because they have been put down their whole life. This is just one reason that is commonly found it can be a combination of things that occur within one-hundred years. Suicide can be a bad thing for both sides. The person committing suicide has to think of what they are leaving behind;maybe the few people who did like them or the places they have loved to visit. The other thoughts may range from things like, I wasn't meant to be here, to it can't get any worse than here. But on the other side, all of your family and your friends will miss you. You might even have a case where your friend thinks, I've lost everything, what else is there to live for. This may cause your friend to hurt themselves or possibly even kill themselves. So suicide can also be very selfish, and never solves the problem that you had in the first place. But I left out a group of people to mention. The people who originally caused the other people to hurt themselves, others, or kill themselves... that's right the bullies. They may say who cares, but on the inside they are devastated by what they have done by their poor choice of words and/or actions. Try and care about people.

    * The whole reason I wrote this was because This really does happen in life. This is a common problem with teens and maybe even some adults. This problem is so easily solved though, if you don't make someone feel bad by your actions or words there is no reason to feel bad unless something involving a family or friend happens or someone has a case of depression. So try to be positive and don't put people down.

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      I read this and it's good. I feel like crap for posting a comment like the last right beneath it, but then you should feel bad for giving me reason to. I'm sorry for the things I've said before.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      I didnt bother reading this. I was just hoping you can make me cry some more. I write well when you say horrible things to me and i want to die. So if we could have another fight soon that would be so dandy. Thanks so much!
    With love always and forever,
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your comments. Kayla I'm sorry to hear about your friend and her problem, I ment in general not always. Cae thank you for your comment, I'm glad to hear people with the same perspective as myself. I'm getting more writing ready to post, so I hope you can enjoy those pieces also.
    Thank you,
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by shepj | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm rather surprised that no one commented on this at all. It angers me so much when a zillion people look at your work but says nothing about it. Not even a simple,. "I didn't like it very much, it didn't appeal to me." Even that would be enough, let the writer know he matters in some way.
    I happened to think this was amazing yet so utterly simple. The message is a wonderful one that everyone should abide by. Think before you speek (Okay so I never do that unless I knw I am going to say something just plain mean and hurtful. But I never think before I say something I feel and believe in) Don't just hurt someone, no matter how much you want to.
    You are totaly right, suicide is an awful thing. I dont' know how much I personaly agree with the selfish part, I mean I know that it is on some level but when you reach the point where you are going to kill yourself you are normally to far gone to understand that anymore. But you should always at least try to think of the chain reaction you cuold cause with your suicide.
    I try to stay positive in life. Today my friend sent me some lyrics to a song that was all about killing people by blowing their heads off and I told him that wasn't the kind of music I like. He siad. "I know. You are to happy." That made me feel good. I'm glad that people are aware that I am a happy person that trys to spread the love.
    I enjoyed reading this a lot. It brought out a lot of things in me that most work I read doesn't. I think more people should comment on this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]

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