A blank page torments me
like a stomach it wants to be full,
but it stares at me naked, exposed
as eager to be filled as an aroused woman,
but I turn away, like an ashamed child
who walked in on his nude mother.
Hi, I really don't understand why peots beat it into the reader's ears that there poems are masterpieces...I don't want to splash the news,but I think ELITESKILLS is a poetry forum where constructive criticisms and deep appreciation of poetry is entertained...if u don't want me to criticise your work without deep observation of your meanings and techniques...please don't post them...I REALLY DON'T WANT TO PUSH THIS TOO FAR...But I think u are taking this too personal...u think WRITER'S BLOCK is a "masterpiece"?Cuddledumplin...you've got something coming...I advice u lrt readers decide on that ...not u.And if u would please allow me to criticise this...here is it...THIS POEM IS NOT EFFECTIVELY CONVEYED...U NEED A VOICE,LEAPING IN MORE THOUGHTFUL PUNTUATIONS...THE THEME IS GOOD...REALLY STRIKES AN EMPATHY IN ME...APOLLO!
Amy, Nice imagery and a fresh approah to our dreaded friend the block. The phisical manifestation of the stomach carried over to the sexual desire was particularly, interesting...by the way, I liike the naked/nude word choice..a nude mother is not exactly shameful,,more natual..but naked..yep starkers..LOL jan
very descriptive of wroters block... great imagery... go figure... first to point out a repeat which isnt exactly a repeat - hmmmm I think I just pointed out a repeating word in someone's work... weird... anyway... great work once again... keep it up
'k, who the *#&#&# does APOLLO think he is????? How dare he jump all over you like that? And I have never known you to take honest, well thought out critique poorly. You're one of the most mature writers I've seen around here. Apollo included... he threw a total hissy-fit over a comment I made a few weeks ago... and you know I give good commentary. It's tough to kill a god, but not impossible... so can I try?
ANYWAY............! The poem was wonderful. Beautifully crafted... and a perfect expression of the agony of writer's block. The word choices are exceptional, especially the final lines. <><