"are they your dreams, or are you theirs?" Although this line seems so out of place at the end of this poem, almost an entirely different mood.... it's so awesome. It's freaking spectacular how you molded that sentence to the perfect structure to leave not only a question in your mind, but a distinct image of things to come. The only thing I don't like about this whole work is the last part where you put "Intriguing..." It's different because it's reflecting on your own thoughts, which is cool, but it almost makes you sound too all-knowing and that you've figured out everything you need to know about this subject. Just my humble opinion.
Interesting questions. Let me know if you come up w/ any answers for that. I love the set up of the piece and the imagery. I enjoy the way the piece makes you think-there's not enough thought provoking work out there anymore. Good job. J
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