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    Author: legalinsane
    ASL Info:    26/M/New York, NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 157/178/40
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 932
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       The things to be learned in the silence of a moment, a stare, and a heartbeat.


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    Wordless Information

    Heed the in between lines
    invisible to endless eyes,
    their focus fixed
    upon only the black and white
    outlines of shapely lettered fragments
    forming partially meaningless sentences
    of endless pronouns without verbs
    to give those pictures motion,
    or emotion

    Less is nothing
    but an inferior idea
    of objectivity,
    on a subject, empty of all meaning
    except for the missing words
    to mis-focus on,
    an open hole in the white
    parchment of hearts,
    a gaping precipice
    to draw in all feeling
    deep into its black existence

    More is everything
    but the end
    of simplicity
    in a life, full of false pretenses
    and random revelations
    to become lost in,
    a gathering cloak to embrace
    on the cold winter days,
    a warm body
    to feast upon the frozen bones
    and heat the lips
    into a smile.

    Such a wonder
    to find such solace
    in but a smile,
    a wordless embrace of two hearts
    eyes locked, relishing in the moments
    hoping that that stare
    will last a lifetime.
    No need to blink away the questions
    love has no use for them,
    they are only functional steps
    to keep the tears from flowing,
    for their newfound joy
    in such simplicity.

    Brian J. Demick




    Submitted on 2004-03-14 15:05:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Although this seems to go against my "less is more" writing style, I still like it. I like the ending lines very much.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      great job, the flow and imagery worked extremely well.. its deep and emotional and i can sense your passion with your words. good job
    | Posted on 2004-03-14 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful write Brian, good flow and iamgery. You did a great job of keeping your reader hanging with the univerals until the last stanza...when that one special smile becomes the focus of the world... Nice one
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-14 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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