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    dots Submission Name: My Wingsdots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1180



    Description:
       I wasn't really trying to be particularly clever, or poetic. I just had some feelings and I needed to express myself. This is how. Hope you like it.


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    dotsMy Wingsdots
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    You make me feel like a child
    playing at the fair.
    The way you hold my hand.
    the way you stroke my hair.

    The hole that is inside my heart
    burns when the wind blows through.
    It always hurts just a little less,
    whenever I'm with you.

    Your touch has the power to wake me,
    from this numb life I lead.
    You call me into aliveness,
    And let me be who i want to be.

    You take the masks I often wear,
    and say its ok to be who you are.
    You do this All without saying anything,
    With every gentle word you touch my heart.

    Slowly the walls outside my heart,
    are beginning to come down.
    I'm always thinking about you.
    I can't believe what love in you I've found.

    When the storms approaching
    and the winds are becoming fierce,
    I don't feel so nervous anymore,
    I know my heart cannot be pierced.

    Perhaps you've helped this crying child
    rediscover the joy love brings.
    Thank you for reminding me,
    reminding me about my wings.




    Submitted on 2004-11-13 03:19:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The hole that is inside my heart
    burns when the wind blows through.
    It always hurts just a little less,
    whenever I'm with you.

    That stanza is my favorite. It makes me think about my best friend. I like this poem overall because it can be applied to all love. The rhyming never seems forced, which is either because of talent or luck, but I would say the first. Good write.
    Hannah
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Perhaps you've helped this crying child
    rediscover the joy love brings.
    Thank you for reminding me,
    reminding me about my wings.

    Regardless of it's meaning, this is a beautiful verse. You have a lovely way with words and I enjoyed reading your writing very much.

    Slowly the walls outside my heart,
    are beginning to come down.
    I'm always thinking about you.
    I can't believe what love in you I've found.

    This stanza touches me as well. It's an amazing feeling with you realize you've found something you've been looking for, for so long.

    Anyways, nice write, I enjoyed it and keep it up.

    Rob
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this write because to me in can be applied to family love, friendship love or love for someone that falls into neither category. Your venting/expression is very good if you can get out what you need to in this structure. The only thing I would change is the word 'aliveness' to 'liveliness' because flows better and seemes to be actual word...happy writing for the future...
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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