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    dots Submission Name: Mind Over Matterdots
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    Author: eener
    ASL Info:    21/f/wi
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 351/370/53
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 989
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just a little empowering piece I just thought of. Enjoy.


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    dotsMind Over Matterdots
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    No matter what stays or goes away
    Your mind will always lead the way
    Toward what truely matters,
    Before their mindful way shatters
    What they think doesn't matter.
    Ignore their mind numbing chatter.

    Your mind is much too strong.
    It matters not where they say you belong.
    Use your mind to overide
    All the matters that coincide
    With the ideas in their mind.
    What matters to you is what you must find.




    Submitted on 2004-11-13 11:41:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      renee, I hope you don't mind me calling you that, I just can't bring myself to call you eener, which I don't even know how to pronounce, nonetheless, renee, this write really shows some blossoming on your part girl. this is divine in every sense of the word. this poem has more depth in it than all of your other pieces put together. and the main reason that you were able to add depth and content to it is because of its' style and structure. you mixed it up a little as far as rhyming goes, which completely added a tremendous amount of meaning to its' subject "mind over matter". and by the way, the rhyming in this piece is entertaining. hey! ok. that's cool. the way you rhymed in this piece not only made this a piece that is easily digested and meaningful, but also entertaining.
    thumbs up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting point you have. I like these kind of meanings their always so deep. Your poem is alright with the flow. Keep the last line long- its the last line come on- I think its alright. Your poem is fine dont change it- good job
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by silly monkey | [ Reply to This ]


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