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    dots Submission Name: The Fish in the Pond.dots
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    Author: Torie
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 176/194/39
    Words: 344
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I spent years discovering my Inner Child
    Then more years discovering my Female Side.
    Now I am in love with my inner fish.
    I want you to come fishing with me.


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    It was a flash of light
    From a pink and silver scale.
    Then it disappeared completely
    In the blackness.

    There it is again
    The sweetest pink
    Causing me to pause
    And look again.

    Two scales!
    And where there are two there might be three
    But back into the darkness again.
    How frustrating.

    The merest glimpse, then blackness.
    Then three or four
    They are articulated and moving together
    They look alive.

    The heliopause gives meaning to the solar system
    And so the pause between scales gives meaning
    It takes time to believe the flash is real
    And longer to guess they may mean: fish.

    In the lap of Black Mountain is a pond in the shape of a teardrop
    But abandoned and black.
    An eye put out.

    I trickled cool, clean water into the eye
    It blinked and opened
    Into the most georgeous, clear pond.

    I became responsible for saving its life.
    It had everything:
    Sunlight, green weeds, water spiders and Kingfishers,
    And even a family of kangaroos.

    It was the most beautiful eye
    And lacked nothing but a pupil.

    With all the exquite timing of an eye surgeon,
    I introduced a goldfish, a golden pupil.

    When I looked into the cool, clear pond,
    The pond looked back and
    Could see the merest flash of scale behind my eye,
    Kindling instant desire.

    But what a shy fish it is
    That plays behind my eyes
    And what a bold fish I have created in the lap of Black Mountain.

    They are separate, they are separate
    And long to be together, so much
    They are in pain. They are in pain together.
    In the most beautiful park, the Botanic Gardens.

    Beauty and pain are married here today
    In the lap of Black Mountain,
    Witnessed by a Kingfisher, a kangaroo and a koala,
    Midwives to a birth behind my eyes,
    Which wide open, see the golden pond
    And half shut, become the pond,
    In love with a fish.

    Ah, my love.

    Torie.




    Submitted on 2004-03-14 18:57:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really nice. It reminds me of last summer when my boyfriend, my brother, his wife, and me went to a nearby lake. There was a goose there with a gaping wound on his neck. We were feeding the geese bread, and it would fall out the wound on his neck. I felt this insane sense of sadness. I wanted to take the goose home and nurse him back to health. My brother went to the ranger's station instead. They sent a biologist to look at the goose. I assume he's ok now. Again, this a nice one.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL great twist to the poem, hehehe loved the imagery.

    "Beauty and pain are married" and aah how that line rings truth.. great job.
    | Posted on 2004-03-14 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]



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