Description: A heliographer is someone who uses mirrors to send messages.
A Glance, A Blush -------------------------------------------
Your eyes of blue fire sear me
Leaving my cheeks pink
I go through a queue of emotions
From embarrassment to happiness
And I share coy glances and schoolgirl smiles
That you flash back at me
My sweet heliographer
This is beautiful. Short, simple, but deep emotions that I think we've all been through at one time or another. After spending years reading poetry debating the different views of true love, it is nice to hear about pure and simple flirting. lol, a grand piece.
I like "blue fire eyes"...more powerful image than "like"...and if you want eyes to burn, more power the better. I have this image of that blue fire...what's that stuff...? under chafing dishes...Sterno! But they say that's hotter than orange flame.
This is cool...as if the idea that he's a heliographer...as if his eyes are not only fire, but intensified by the mirrors...flashing you unmistakable messages of passion. Cool piece.
That is so sweet, childlike, and innocent. I can proudly admit that I relate to this so well. Whenever he peeks at me, or I, or both of us, I blush with shame as if it's a sin to look at someone. Then I feel exhilirated and fresh; I feel like dancing all night. This is exceptional. Take care
i like blue fire eyes the best, just 'cause it's different and unexpected. it's like you're almost looking in a mirror here, with your glances and coy smiles coming back at you. this is what i like to see, a happy, smiling you!
"Blue fire eyes" is much better. It uses less words, and fits well with your short, to-the-point poems. I love it. It's weird actually, this sounds a little like a poem I just wrote, and we both posted them around the same time. Must be on the same wavelength . As usual, I like this. You seem to be getting back into your stride. And I'm glad to see it.
the usual from you i presume. anyway, i kinda like the way you weaved the last part in sense that it fits quite well... the blue part of a flame is always the hottest, after all. i guess most people are in a way "infatuation junkies" ...
I can't decide if I like 'your blue fire eyes' or 'your eyes like blue fire' more. it both sounds great. but I really like the title cause it fits so perfectly. I like that you use 'exotic' words. makes the whole thing more interesting. cause always the same 'normal' words is boring. and heliographer makes a great image.
I can't decide if I like 'your blue fire eyes' or 'your eyes like blue fire' more. it both sounds great. but I really like the title cause it fits so perfectly. I like that you use 'exotic' words. makes the whole thing more interesting. cause always the same 'normal' words is boring. and heliographer makes a great image.
I love "Your eyes like blue fire sear me" nice! Again, you taken us into the unknown with "heliographer" it's a beautiful way to send messages of light from the sun within us. I enjoyed this very much. nan
I can see how the last line fits in but it doesn't seem a bit obscure compared to the rest of the lines, which seemed to flow naturally, and the last line kind of stutters a bit. How about something like:
"That you persist to imitate"
I think the repetition of the word 'blow' throws it off the most, even though it makes perfect sense. I enjoyed reading this though, nice write!
"Your eyes like blue fire sear me " -I don't care for the simile here, I think it chops up the image a bit. "Your blue fire eyes sear me"-I like this better but the stressed words seemed arranged with a different choppiness. *Your eyes of blue fire sear me* is my suggestion, though I am only going on about this because you asked, and when asked something I go off on tangents.
I really liked "queue of emotions" and of course the heliographer reference, "flashing" unspoken messages to you, -and you blush, because these messages are reflections of your own thought. I liked that, because it's seldom the actual words spoken that cause the blushing reaction, its their own inner thoughts exposed (they think)-"busted" huh? Delightful, a nice blend of sophistication and the ingenue. Silver
Submission Name: A Glance, A Blush
Cool piece. 
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