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    dots Submission Name: Date of Termination (D.O.T)dots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is just a piece I wrote about two years ago. I had just been accepted into university when this experience occured, and was feeling really torn, and confused.

    General feedback, feelings, thoughts thanks.
    :) TS
    XO


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    dotsDate of Termination (D.O.T)dots
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    It only takes one moment to create you,
    Many moments to decide you,
    A second to regret you.
    And a lifetime to forget you.

    For my mistake you must pay.
    I will feel guilty everyday.

    I dont want to do this to you,
    But no matter what I do
    You see, I am destined to lose.

    If I give you life, I am sacrificing my own.
    If I send you home early, I will forever be alone.
    Because of my stupidity...A beautiful life will be lost.
    I know that I should raise you up, No matter what the cost.

    I have a life and have lived some.
    You haven't breathed a breath.
    Yet I have the ordassity to snatch that away from you as if it was my right.
    I have no rights.

    I am wrong. Whatever I choose is wrong.
    I should never have ended up in this situation.
    My stupidity. My mistake not yours.
    However...You must pay.
    And I will feel guilty everday.




    Submitted on 2004-11-14 21:36:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ok, So it seems things aren't as obvious as they seem to me when I'm writing.

    I am the author of this poem, and I just wanted to let those out there wondering what it is exactly I was writing about.

    This particular poem relates specifically to the notion of Abortion. (I thought the name gave it away). I like being a little bit secretive with my writing. :) Thanks for the feedback.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by words_can_heal | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the first paragraph. I like how you use the time line to show importance of each thing in order. I wish I knew the whole story of what was happening, but I guess that is what makes poetry so much fun, and so interesting. Nice write and good job.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      So, what exactly happened?
    I am sorry something bad happened to you at that time, i hope things are better now!

    *Congratulations on getting into college!
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Obviously a very personal subject and full of emotion. This poem generates you emotions, and for me captivates the reader. I loved the true expression of feeling. Great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, wow... that's so... *sighs* i can see how you could connect yourself to my poem. i never really aggreed with abortion either.. but sometimes, a girl has to. even if they have the baby, they wouldnt be able to support it or some excuse like that. i know its taking away a life that never had a chance... its something you will have to bare the rest of your life. its sad, but so true.
    Jessica
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by nameless child | [ Reply to This ]


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