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    dots Submission Name: Your Pupildots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The was inspired by a Vik Muniz picture. You can see it at http://www.vikmuniz.net/main.html


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    dotsYour Pupildots
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    I see my face reflected,
    twins on your pupils,
    framed by your irises
    like green suns
    wondering why
    I can stand my faces there
    when I can't bear
    even one in a mirror.




    Submitted on 2004-11-15 05:01:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Im a big fan of the eyes and believe that they are the mirror to the soul. sometimes its so hard to look at someone or to be looked at knowing that. the eyes say it all. wonderful piece. andi like your new picture too! take care
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple and good. I think it's neat when you look at someone and can see your reflection in their eyes. I usual laugh that I actually find it amusing. ;) Good piece.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sure there are plenty of other meanings to this, but what I get is that you don't like to see yourself because it makes you feel exposed. I know how that is. I was standing in for an actor the other day in rehearsal (he was on a college visit) and of course a picture of me and a few other people ended up in the paper I realized how much I don't want to see myself. Anyway, I'll go take a look at the picture.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      is it strange to categorize this as a love poem?? if it is, well - so be it.
    you don't like your reflection in the mirror but you like to see your face reflected in his iris. why?? my interpretation is that you're in love with this person. you tell me if this is far fetched.
    anyway I really like your vivid descriptions. your poem fits to the picture. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      The sweet call of egalitarianism rings true here. If anyone whom we encounter as a reflection is placed on a pedestal, we've missed the sheer quality they indeed mirror that is rightly ours. Pardon my reflection on this, it's a great piece, and there's nothing to change. Now that the green suns have risen in your eyes there are not skies beyond your ablity. nan
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cool! it is strange to see yourself mirrored back in someone else's eyes like that. perhaps it is because it is so fascinating that we can look at it. mirrors are often harsh in the strange light of a bathroom. seeing yourself in someone's eyes mutes the effect. well done, Amy! very unique, as usual.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      What simple beauty. I wish I could offer something in the way of advice, but how can I teach the teacher. I am your humble pupil (and I'll deal with whatever reflections this leads to).
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      I wouldn't dub the picture a "painting", but a work of art it certainly is. Must have been a time consuming effort putting it together too. The poem's good too. May I suggest you try some persona poems though? Pick a character, try to imagine how they view the world and express their viewpoint. I think you might just be very good at doing that, like you seem to get under the skin of things...
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      This gives the reader a lot and I think it is always a great excercise to write a poem off of inspiration from a painting and it always seems to produce such vivid and solid writing. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Belle De Jour | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful! This encompasses the feelings that I remember encountering when I stared into my ex-fiance's eyes. it's short but in it's length you captured so much. Salude
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a nice write. Though the person that is the first person in this ('I' see my face etc) is feeling a little bad about themselves, seeing as they can stand themselves in someone else's eyes but not their own, and I think that's a great meaning for a piece. Nice work!
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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