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    dots Submission Name: Strangedots
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    Author: Zu
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 446/379/76
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       sometimes you think you know someone, but then you dont, and you can never will, ican sit next to a person who's my friend we can talk about anything, but still i dont know the person. you know? sometimes i can be like that too.....


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    dotsStrangedots
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    Gathering darkness
    Drifting into the unknown
    Stretching out away
    Where you walk slowly alone
    I can’t follow you there
    That’s out of bounds
    I can just sit here
    Until I can be found.

    I think I know
    But I’m afraid I do not
    How can I?
    When you lie with closed eyes
    Your agoraphobia
    Keeps me away.

    Your soul is through to see
    There is no will for revenge
    Although you’ll sit beside me
    You’ll always be so strange
    Always be strange…

    Roped off from the others
    So that they can’t see
    But I wonder why?
    Why that disguise
    The mask painted on your face
    Hiding you from yourself.

    Your soul is through to see
    There is no will for revenge
    Although you’ll sit beside me
    You’ll always be so strange

    Yes your soul is through to see
    But there is no will for revenge
    And although you’ll sit beside me
    You’ll always be so strange.

    So strange…
    Always be strange
    I can think I know you
    But you’ll always be strange
    Always be so strange
    So strange…




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      I love, "your soul is through to see" it reminds me of a hand passing through a ghost. You have a nice feel for human folly and express it with great clarity. Thanks for sharing your lyrics. Keep writing,
    peace, nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      awsome lyrics... the way you put you thoughts into words was very well done... wat i realized the most is that you have no chours... thats not bad,,,but i believe all songs should have a chours but that is just me... great work... would love to hear it with music... keep writen... cant wait to see more

    *ULA~(I'm going to take a Muliki on that one)*
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by ULA | [ Reply to This ]
      I particularly like how you can focus your mind on something and write lyrics about them. My favourite part was the stanza that started with 'roping off' because the last line says hiding you from yourself, which I think is great lyricism. And its too true that some people don't come to terms with who they really are.

    So for me, reading your lyrics always bring a touch of reality, whereas my writes are all about things that'll probably never happen. As for my new post, I'm waiting for a high enough ratio because I've done so much to build it up to what I have now. Anyway, great write, and see you round!

    James
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease
    i love your picture metallica rocks
    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work
    love peace and chicken grease

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      your description is very cool...its like you think you know everything about your friend and then you find out you bareley know thema dn then they're a strnger to you... this poem is very strong i love this...its so true...keep up the good work

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]


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