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    dots Submission Name: Safe Lovedots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Wrote this one about 3 weeks ago. Just met someone I liked. Still seeing him, for those who are curious. Not really doing a very good job of this relationship thing, but Im trying.
    Hope its a good read for you.


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    dotsSafe Lovedots
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    It used to be so easy, I knew just what to do.
    But now it all feels so different, I relate so much to you.
    I feel like Im learning to walk, when I thought I already knew how.
    Iím thinking too much about this, I need to stay in the now.
    Do I even want to do this? Is this how I want to feel?
    Is this the only way, for people like me to heal?
    I used to be so good at this, boys were just my thing.
    But its all changed so suddenly, and I donít know anything.
    Except that I'm so scared, regretful and excited.
    Why do I have to go into this, feeling so damn frightened?
    It all seems too hard, it takes effort I donít need.
    Especially if it ends up yet again, leaving my soul to bleedÖ.




    Submitted on 2004-11-15 18:41:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the contradictory the poem and the title have. "Safe Love" and this poem is about re-experiencing it. I really liked this line,
    "Iím thinking too much about this, I need to stay in the now."

    Stay in the now and learn, don't think of the past and how experienced you were. I think this is a great write. :) I hope you are happy with your new guy.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem, well written and well presented too, I really liked the part saying
    "I feel like Im learning to walk, when I thought I already knew how.
    Iím thinking too much about this, I need to stay in the now."
    Very good image created and the words are well chosen too.
    I think the feeling you are descrbing in your poem is not weird, I mean everyone reaches a certain point and starts searching for "A Safe Love", it's so hard to find! It's just a phase all people go through at a certain point in their life.
    Anyway Good effort and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]


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