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    dots Submission Name: The song of the Cuckoodots
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    Author: Lightbringer
    ASL Info:    25/M/under your couch
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 188/210/36
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I don't really know where I got this idea but this Cuckoo thing has been haunting me all day. I wrote two other pieces on the Cuckoo thing but I'll post those later. Tell me what you think about this.


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    dotsThe song of the Cuckoodots
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    The Cuckoo sings a melody
    Stolen from the gods
    Amid the falling oak leaves
    On a blanket made of moss.

    "Ho there little Cuckoo bird,
    Where did you learn my tune?"
    Asks a voice from high above
    Just behind the waxing moon.

    "I learned it from my mother!"
    The Cuckoo hautily replied,
    "She taught me from her death bed
    on the day before she died."

    "You're lying little cuckoo bird,
    tell the truth now, it's your choice."
    "NO!" yelled the arrogent Cuckoo bird
    and he promptly lost his voice.

    "You had your chance to save yourself
    to repent and recieve forgiveness
    but through your arrogance
          you've lost your voice
    You've gotten yourself into quite a mess."

    "You stole that song from my daughter
    and she begs me to show you mercy
    and so for her, Here take your voice
    but never turn it toward me."

    "Dearest Evening Star please don't turn away
    I present myself here to you kneeling
    I didn't know it was your daughter's song
    The woods played a trick on my hearing."

    "The river nymph's song was not my goal
    when I hid on the banks and heard singing
    Twas the song of the otter folk I wanted for mine
    Not the angelic song of a godling."

    "Arise little Cuckoo, my anger is gone
    but this is a lesson you needed to learn
    Don't steal from a godling, nay don't steal at all
    You'll have your own song in your turn."




    Submitted on 2004-11-15 18:42:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'd say this has a bit of political satire in it, even if that wasn't the intent. Those who hide behind the lines to take what's not theirs; those who are forgiven, and in the end worse off for it, yet benefiting from it nonetheless.

    A nice little story nonetheless, and all the better in poem format. I like things like that, like the Red Fisherman and such, that have something to say, but say it so much better when it's in a format that can flow as easily as this; almost like a song, but with more meaning, and much less ambiguous, yet still open to interpretation.

    Great job.
    ~Spire~
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by Spire | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this it reminds me the the magical land of fearie in this book I read, jack the giant killer, and drink down the moon.
    I loved them both and I love the imagination. it awsome.
    Keep posting about the Cuckoo.
    Kacey
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
      An original theme, and very well carried through. And the dialogue back and forth was very clever.
    Nice write, we'll be waiting for the others.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]



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