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    Author: brain
    ASL Info:    28/m/Miami FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 27/37/12
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Gone away are the days that I would play
    basketball and sit and shoot the shit
    with my friends,
    we would get up about ten, be on the court
    by 11, and be down with the dreams by 12

    We would be each others' closest confidants
    throughout those years,
    from '88 to '96.



    God, where does the time go?

    Where do the days of our youth retreat,
    or when fade, our dreams and hopes to sleep?
    Wonder, I always seem,
    to, and I ask my Father often, where did the light
    of our youth cease to gleam?

    My God, why can I see no longer, friends,
    the ones that were always on my team,
    even when we weren't actually on the same team?






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