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    dots Submission Name: Where were you ?dots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 783
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1168



    Description:
       I have written many poems on this site of late, specifically one called 'the memory'. People were messeaging me asking what it was about, also with 'the crying child'.

    This poem might shed some more light on what I write about, or it could confuse you even more.

    this poem makes me really angry all over again.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWhere were you ?dots
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    Mummy…
    Daddy…
    Where are you?

    The crop of hate
    Keeps growing.
    Thin wispy vines of anger
    Strangling my barely beating heart.
    Suffocating
    Engulfing my entire being.
    Torturing me through my tears.

    Resentment festering
    Like mould it sticks.

    Where were you?
    Mummy…daddy….
    I was alone.

    The anger lashes out.
    Like a knife it carves through all the hate.
    The girl inside begs.
    Begs for me to forgive.

    Then the pain strikes me again.
    Violently slashing at my insides.
    I remember.
    The ache.

    Where were you?
    He hurt me Mummy. Daddy.
    He hurt me. I hate you.

    I was precious.
    Just little.
    A girl with pigtails in my hair.
    And a song in my heart.
    I resent you.

    Then he hurt me.
    And you didn’t see.
    I grew up that day.
    I grew up ...abused.

    And now I’m 20. Broken. A little girl.
    Who can’t love anymore.

    Where were you?





    Submitted on 2004-11-15 20:47:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved it. Words cannot express how much i love this poem. It's amazginly done, i can feel everything little thing, and i truly understand, i've been there, except the 20 part, 16 is enough though. Amazing write, i can;t belive how you go so many emotions and ideas put into this poem. Stunning and breathetaking.
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... this is awesome! Well written... i find it really hard to get in touch with the anger but you have inspired me to try again...keep writing.. i will have to watch out for more..
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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