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    dots Submission Name: A father's Lovedots
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    Author: words_can_heal
    ASL Info:    22 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/111/22
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1053
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       This poem is very special to me.
    i hope you enjoy it,
    I still enjoy reading it.


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    dotsA father's Lovedots
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    I don't know why he hates me.
    He's never told me why.
    He can't stand to be near me.
    I won't let it make me cry.

    He's going to her funeral.
    I want to be there for him.
    Be he just glared at me screaming
    'You can't change anything!'

    He's right I cannot change things,
    But I'm really hurt by this too.
    She was my mother daddy...
    This is not just about you.

    He says he see's her smiling,
    when he looks into my face.
    He says she wasn't meant to go.
    Her precious life has gone to waste.

    'I'm sorry' is what I say to him.
    'I'll do my hair a different way'
    Then he envelopes me in his arms and says,
    'Sorry's not something you have to say'

    She was beautiful I tell him.
    He nodds and says that she was too.
    I wipe away his tears and he says
    'She was beautiful, and so are you'.




    Submitted on 2004-11-16 02:00:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok good poem but it reminds me a bit of those email poems that can sometimes make you tear up... i think you have a typo i dont think it is nodd it is nod.. maybe im wrong. I think that the concept is endearing it was a very touching poem. I am glad you like it because i enjoyed it myself.. maybe you can give me some thoughts or whatever on some of my poetry..
    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      That's an incredibly sad poem. I'm sorry you were even in this situation (if it's non-fictional, that is.)

    I like the way it was put together. It flowed very well and was easy to read. I could feel the fathers anger, sadness, and depression. I could feel him trying to be strong for his daughter, as well.

    This was a very beautiful piece, ma'am.

    She was beautiful I tell him.
    He nodds and says that she was too.
    I wipe away his tears and he says
    'She was beautiful, and so are you'

    I liked that last stanza as it left the reader with a feeling of closure.
    I'm glad you did that too or else I'd still be upset about reading this!

    Take care and I'm very sorry.

    Rob
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]


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