Friend in Question

Author: arkay ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450 /320 /56 Words: 101

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Friend in Question

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I plea thee not this day of sorrow for sighs and tears which I may borrow Though sadness deep and heart is heavy; calmness I must keep to face the morrow. My friend is gone, I have no doubt. His place by my side is empty, not to call out. No reason I find for this absence of grace. Confusion in mind causing me bother. No pointed words have parted lips. Perhaps intrusion causing the ellipse. This silent departure has left me with pause Chances be this marcher was no friend at all.

Submitted on 2004-11-16 09:45:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the poem very much but part of it was ruined right from the begining when I saw that you hadn't really lost a friend. I don't think that should be the describtion of the poem. Great write though.

| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]

I like the first 3 paragraphs, but kinda got lost after them... I do know how it feels to lose a friend, whether it's to death, moving, etc... = IT HURTS!

| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]

Icould never really get into Shakespeare the dialogue reminded me of the bible, but I do like this poem. Good times, good stuff.

| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by The Black Rose | [ Reply to This ]

o wow...superb! I love your use of the shakesperian dialect here, it was really good. For someone who has not lost a friend, you describe the feeling so well. I hope to read more of your work soon:) ->Dark

| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]

the only problem is no words really exist to show adequatly what anyone would feel in that situation.. course for the ones that we do have.. this is well put together.. i hope you never lose a loved one but if you do.. you'll see what i mean.. you couldn't ever make another understand..

| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]

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