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    dots Submission Name: Truthdots
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    Author: ashlee_jane2003
    ASL Info:    24-female-Indianapolis
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 210/210/39
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 253
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 415



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    You could tell me the truth
    How you don't love me
    And you never will

    You could tell me the truth
    How I'm nothing to you
    And that won't change

    You could tell me the truth
    About how quickly you moved on
    And I should too

    You could tell me the truth
    But I already know
    And now you're nothing to me




    Submitted on 2004-11-16 13:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tell me the truth.

    Good grief. I hate this feeling. How you KNOW something, yet the person won't tell you, and you just . already let them go in your heart before they even tell you out loud what's going on. Because you love them so much and your heart is so in tune with them. You portrayed that beautifully in this piece. *Smattering of applause*

    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      This shows your emotion so very well, it is just overpowering. At a glance it seems to be a wall of water that if not broken with knock you over. That is the effect it had on me. This is superb...I can relate perfectly with this, and it sounds excellent. Wonderful work!
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written. I liked your choice of words. I liked how you hit the sought emotion right on the nose. Very cool. I hope to see more great work like this from you.
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by BloodyWords | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess this was one of those therapeutic poems huh? This guy must've been very cold blooded. Your poem has a nice flow to it. Keep it up. Sorry about that jerk and glad you moved on.
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by soadman | [ Reply to This ]



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