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    dots Submission Name: The Turkeydots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       This was a poem written for my christmas cards last year. thought I'd start christmas early lol


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    "Get stuffed!" cried the Turkey
    I don't need a good roasting!
    "But the pig has been porked"
    Cackled the crackling, boasting.
    "It's that time of year
    You must know how it goes
    Oh come, come dear Turkey
    Everyone Knows!"

    "You've a funny old life,
    It has to be said
    And it seems to begin
    When they cut off your head.

    You get plucked, you get trussed
    You get dressed, and then crowned
    You get stuffed, you get roasted,
    Then you get gobbled down.
    Crackers get pulled
    For a bit of a joke!
    A cork popped for wine
    You're toasted and soaked!

    Then pudding, of course!
    All hot and steamy.
    A fruity delight,
    Delicious and creamy,
    Mmmmmmmm!

    "Yes, but what of me then?" the Turkey cried.
    The crackling just cackled, hissed and sighed.




    Submitted on 2004-11-16 16:37:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thiw was a good poem, lol, i really! enjoyed reading it, i liked the personifications, and the way you used them. good job
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by latykim | [ Reply to This ]
      It's such a cute poem! I just love it! Great work in bringing the characters to life. I especially liked the part where you described how the turky would be stuffed.lol I hope to read more of your poetry soon.
    -Lora
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by lora | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee. That is a great poem and it made me laugh. Everyone must love getting Christmas cards from you!

    Its very original as well, I dont think I've ever read a poem about turkeys before!

    love from Heather
    x
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by poketmouse | [ Reply to This ]
      HAH! Its great! Kind of...I don't know. it's just great. Makes my mouth water...yum...but also makes me feel bad for the poor ol turkey. O.o Oh well! Heh, a lovely piece for either christmas or thanksgiving, here in the good ol US of A. Excellent write, gave me a bit of a chuckle. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      Rhyme and meter, check
    diction, check
    seasonal theme, check
    Sending this to everyone you know and not caring if they think you've lost it,
    priceless.

    My kind of writer,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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