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    dots Submission Name: Lust of my heartdots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I originally submitted this poem on my old account, just thought i would add it to my collection on my perm account. Feedback would be great, but be gentle with me, was my first poem. All the feedback i recieved before was greatly appreciated, anyone feels they want to offer new feedback, thanks.


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    dotsLust of my heartdots
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    You get used to the nights alone,
    the linear events of your life,
    the gutwrenching feelings of rejection
    and the cold release of the knife.

    It pains you to know all hope is lost,
    ripped from your chest, along with your heart.
    Razor thin slices of regret,
    predicitable issues from the start.

    Slice my throat, rip into the wound,
    devour my arms and legs just to start.
    Murder me with your silent promises,
    just take away the lust of my heart.

    That final feeling long sought after,
    that feeling of being in love delivered strong.
    Delivered like an execution,
    another relationship gone wrong.

    You tell yourself this time will be different,
    this time i will be saved.
    Save your optimism for your funeral,
    your pointless feelings engraved.

    Slice my throat, rip into the wound,
    devour my arms and legs just to start.
    Murder me with your silent promises,
    just take away the lust of my heart.

    Bury yourself in your room,
    bury yourself in a song,
    bury yourself in your destructive life,
    the pain is just far too long.

    Lying kisses, false happiness,
    in the pain of a misleading touch.
    Imbedded loneliness everlasting,
    the charade was just too much.

    Slice my throat, rip into the wound,
    cyanide kisses as i depart.
    I hope your selfish desires were worth it,
    death will release the lust of my heart.




    Submitted on 2004-11-16 18:46:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      did you mean destructive life? on stanza 7
    and again you were successful on getting your point aross you were better on your stanzas
    spellcheck.net it's free online
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      It would make a really good song. For some reason I got the tune of "Rodeo" by Garth Brooks just without the countryness to it if that makes any sense at all. It was a good poem though. That's about how I feel about relationships. To me, it's a waste of time to even try now a days. If you don't give it up within an alloted time, kiss that one good bye. It's ridiculous. Anyway, good write once again. I'm really enjoying your work. Keep me posted will ya?
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]


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