Do you know what it's like...
to love something so much
to want something so much...
to need it
But know that you can never ever have it?
I walk off stage.
Sorry but you're just not good enough.
Do you know what it's like to be told that you're dreams are never going to come true?
Do you know what it's like to wish and hope and pray for your dreams to come true...
But know that even if you try your hardest...
Even if your the best there is...
You're the most determined...
The most talented...
You still can't reach your goal?
Flowers and hugs.
I walk off stage.
You love this? You can't have it.
No matter how hard I work
My dream can never be my reality.
I liked this, it's kind of negative, but it gets your feelings across well. I can ALMOST, slightly relate to this, maybe not in the same way though...I acted in plays all through High school and we competed and everything, and I would LOVE to be an actress, but I just don't see it happening, and I don't think anyone else does either. But keep trying and don't lose sight of what's most important to you.
Your poem does a great job in showing your frustration, or someone's frustration. and although I like the way you have written it, unique structure and all, I find I cannot nagree with the message. In my book there is no "I can't", there is only the determination to find a way. When an obsticle rears its head, I find that I become more determined to find the way. It becomes a matter of not giving up.
i liked the subject matter of this poem. especially the 2nd and 4th stanzas where u compare yourself as a performer. i feel your sad and defeated tone. all i can say is keep dreaming, i'll wait for your success poems to come!
that is a bunch of crap, i don't know what you are looking for in terms of feedback, but here is mine, you cannot, CANNOT let go of what you want to do, because it will be there for you and you will make it. Don't you know? this is coming from a Marine that never thought that he could be one, and a guitarist in a band that his own flesh said he would never be good enough for, so yes, this poem hit me right square in the balls. i totally know how it feels to be told all that crap, but i never gave up on myself, and neither should you. OKAY? your poem was a good one, and very real, great job.
I also can see the fruststration. I really would have maybe liked to see the problem described but. Either way it is still a good write I would only want it described more for my own personal use. haha. keep it up.