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    dots Submission Name: Letting You Read Thisdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLetting You Read Thisdots

    Letting you read this
    is like stripping myself naked
    and letting you inspect
    my carefully concealed flaws,
    And feeling your scorn...
    But you have sex with me anyway
    and criticize my imperfect face,
    imperfect body, imperfect technique,
    but you know that my heart was not there,
    and why give your heart to someone heartless?
    If I've failed before I begin, why try?
    But I do it anyway and invite your scorn.

    Submitted on 2004-03-15 20:57:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Being the eternal optimist I can definitely "relate" to the poem. It was descriptive, insightful, and heart felt. It touched me deeply, because I have felt that way (as I am sure there are many others who have felt the same way).
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Soooooo this is what it looks like inside you... lolj/k... another good one full of emotion and insight (no pun intended, of course) keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      very good description....u take us deep and let me feel the scen instead of hearing it....that's what poetry's about good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by AngelOfAnarchy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm the eternally optimistic soul of a woman... Nicely put together as always... It takes a lot of currage to put this out for inspection as it seems personal, yet it is so sadly universal.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      You invite my admiration! Really like the way you put things in a perspective that I would have never thought about… cool write.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]

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