"Buddies" by ashlee

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Author:	ashlee_jane2003
ASL Info:	24-female-Indianapolis
Elite Ratio:	3.39 - 210/210/39
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/The pain inside
Total Views:	341
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	396

Description:
Kind of cliché with the whole "slit my wrist" thing but again I know all of the emotion that created this poem.

"Buddies" dots

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Why does it have to be like this?
Why didn't I slit my wrist?
It would have felt so good, I know it!
God damn, I feel like shit.
Why can't you just leave me alone?
"No, I don't wanna be your fuck buddy...
I just wanna go home"
"Alright, fine, if you insist."
But you'll be the reason I slit my wrist.

Submitted on 2004-11-17 08:26:23 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  Ah yes. The infamous **** buddy. You. . are good enough for the moment, but not for the whole day/time/relationship. You're just there fore a few seconds of carnal pleasure. Pure lust. What is this? This pisses me off. Just because things like this happen every day to a lotta people. Sucks. *Sighs*
~BCute
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't think cutting or suicide and rhyme make good bedfellows. Seriously, this is like a sick nursery rhyme in the "I feel so blue inside, I'm going to commit suicide" vein.
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  Man oh man. Short, straight and to the point. The message was as hard as you could get it in this piece. i think the quotations were well planned out, but they just don't fit in with the rest of the piece. Gerat job anyway.
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Bassrifts | [ Reply to This ]
  again straight to the point. I love that in a poem. I mean dont get me wrong I like to have to think about the meaning when I am reading it but it is nice to have a break and see one that tells you straight out what its about. Well keep up the good work and I will keep reading it.
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
  No Need to slit your wrist !
its all part of life's twists !
you get hurt through alot of people
only to learn the value of good people !

sometimes it seems weird i know
but it all comes with the flow
the flow of life
the flow of you heart
and you as well must play your part
don't give up
and don't let go
there's alot you will do

don't slit your wrist
and be part of the twist..
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Excellent poem and words although i'm against pessimism but you've well described your emotions purely and sincerly .. and thank you for commenting on my poem :)
i usually reply poems with poems.. i hope you enjoy thanks :)
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
  this one hit home- i think alot of people are going to be able to relate to the simpleness and the emotion behind it- i like it and i wouldnt change anything about it
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by nicegurlintx | [ Reply to This ]
  ok, this poem was so simple, yet immensely powerful. i wish more people could read this poem. it seems so true. i wouldn't change a thing about it. you really let your frustration be shown. what i like about your work is that there doesn't seem to be a rigid structure you follow. it almost seems as if these were the thoughts you were having at the actual time it happened. that's a great tool to be able to use. good job.
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by soadman | [ Reply to This ]

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