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pain


Author: runaway_poet
ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42 /41 /21
Words: 199
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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pain



Danerous times and dangerous places

peircing eyes and hate filled faces

slipping time missing places

covers me with your weary laces

so i try to drink it away

the pain wont leave why does it stay

is it karma have i wronged is the the way,the way i have to pay

i have tried everything once i even tries to pray

but the wounds wont the they will only stay

time is my enemy reality me noose

i cannot defeat time...perhaps a truce

silence engulfs all around

erie it is having no sound

then the question comes to surface the thout starts to pound

why am i here has the answer been found?

reality hits be ands a fall for the ground

and my soul makes a whine like the whine of a hound

and then i was abducted and taken hostage by reality where i was alone gagged and bound

and is left me in my mind for the where im never to be found

where im left here in silense alone with no sound




Submitted on 2004-11-17 10:50:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  interesting a little to much um maybe rhyme scheme great topic try a little more thought with imagery and you will have people reading and writing exceptional comments no bad intents made just a thoughtsandman
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  To many misspellings. Great content though. Rhyme and rythmn is good. I kinda feel like I'm listening to an Irish man though. Was that your purpose? If so, you did well.
-Lora
| Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by lora | [ Reply to This ]


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