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Danerous times and dangerous places peircing eyes and hate filled faces slipping time missing places covers me with your weary laces so i try to drink it away the pain wont leave why does it stay is it karma have i wronged is the the way,the way i have to pay i have tried everything once i even tries to pray but the wounds wont the they will only stay time is my enemy reality me noose i cannot defeat time...perhaps a truce silence engulfs all around erie it is having no sound then the question comes to surface the thout starts to pound why am i here has the answer been found? reality hits be ands a fall for the ground and my soul makes a whine like the whine of a hound and then i was abducted and taken hostage by reality where i was alone gagged and bound and is left me in my mind for the where im never to be found where im left here in silense alone with no sound |
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interesting a little to much um maybe rhyme scheme great topic try a little more thought with imagery and you will have people reading and writing exceptional comments no bad intents made just a thoughtsandman| | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ] | To many misspellings. Great content though. Rhyme and rythmn is good. I kinda feel like I'm listening to an Irish man though. Was that your purpose? If so, you did well. | -Lora | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by lora | [ Reply to This ] | |
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