Description: More fanfic done at the request of a friend. I don't know how great it is but it is based in Forgotten Realms, told through the eyes of Drizzt Do'Urden, and is told at a time during the book "Exile" (by RA Salvatore) when Drizzt was having trouble keeping himself from going feral (good word?) Anyway, i hope you all enjoy it.
-drizzt
The Hunter Within -------------------------------------------
Here I stand
Beyond the realms of mortal man
I have forsaken my people
And with them my being
I have become something else
A beast, here in the Underdark
So cunning and powerful
That none dare to invade my territory
And those that do
Are met with an untimely death
I have forgotten mercy
Forgotten the difference
Between the passion of battle
And cold-blooded murder
I would even kill my own family
Were it not for Guenhwyvar
The panther that holds
My last shred of sanity
I must quell this monster
Must fight it back
But every time I battle
Does not some part of me unleash it?
Is not the hunter necessary for survival?
To live or to survive?
The simplest of questions
With the most complex connotations
Would that I could choose a third option—death.
But I must go on
Must fight the hunter within
But still unleash him in the field
He is as much a part of me
As I am a part of me
This endless torment
Brought on by isolation
From civilization
The only cure, my deepest fear
Society shall be my undoing.
this is pretty good. I like the darkness in it. I do feel a little duality in the character. I have that same quality and the same inner toil. I think you develop your character quite well. You can feel for the character. one part that really hits me is "Forgotten the difference Between the passion of battle And cold-blooded murder" That is some element of insanty there, to lose that moral fiber has to be scary. a very cool write with highly descriptive elements and a dark tone I admire.
this was a very indeepth sight on what most everyone feels as in the teenage stage always hungry for the lust and never worry about the consiquences of our actions. this was a well writen peice and I enjoied reading it. Keep up the great work. Firedemon
wicked sweet! .. it reads like one of drizzts journal entries. It's great to read fanfiction from someone who understands the deeper meaning of things the character goes through. I've only met one other person who understands drizzt like you do (and i dont mean me ).
But I must go on Must fight the hunter within But still unleash him in the field He is as much a part of me As I am a part of me
This endless torment Brought on by isolation From civilization The only cure, my deepest fear Society shall be my undoing.
This is really awesome, so is the whole piece, but this I love. I guess it's because I've read and I know how he struggles with his inner self, the hunter. write more, write more..
Aww, Drizzt, this piece doesn't suck, it's just...well, look at it this way. I have a poem that had forty views, and only like, eight people commented. o.o So, eight out of every forty people comment. And that's just said. And this piece doesn't suck, it just...lacks feeling. It sounds more like it was forced than if it just flowed.
And maybe you could tell us more about what book it came from. But really, it doesn't suck. It has good imagery:
This endless torment Brought on by isolation From civilization The only cure, my deepest fear Society shall be my undoing.
It actually makes me think of these characters from this different anime/manga's:
Demon InuYasha from: InuYasha
Uchiha's Itachi and Sasuke from: Naruto
All of us have had pieces that people read and not bothered to comment, even me. This piece doesn't suck, and your other works are great, trust me. Keep smiling and writing,
Man this piece sucks! It's been on for over six hours and its only had 5 views! what a crappy poem. It must have a crappy title too, because its only had 5 views. And it hasn't even gotten a single comment before this one. Talk about sheer crap. I hope this writer never puts out such a crappy piece again. Geez. -drizzt
Submission Name: The Hunter Within
