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    Author: poetsoul
    ASL Info:    17/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 109/151/32
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    this is the last time
    and the first time.
    maybe thats why it hurts so much,
    maybe thats why its so hard to breath.
    this never happend before,
    at least not like this.
    i see your face,
    your eyes closed in utter bliss.
    i feel your cold breath on my neck,
    your hands held tight with mine.
    so far away...but so close,
    whats next?
    theres no more games to play, you can only go so far without going all the way.
    im all used up by you,
    and im waiting...
    but you swear its not like the last time.
    your right i guess, its not.
    this time i stoped fighting it.
    it felt sick the first time,but this time its different.
    i wish i didnt like this, at least not so much.
    im beyond help,
    maybe thats why i stoped fighting it.




    Submitted on 2004-11-17 15:26:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It sounds to me as if your finally breaking within, not caring in a way, primal feelings will almost always win. Your dangerously close to the edge of an even deeper void, almost as if your thowing it all away for some bliss. the hunger never going away, always feeding and destroying you from the inside of your soul, and when you fight back, uncertainty comes up and restrains you.
    I'm sorry
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      You make it sound so bad, though I guess there's a lot of truth in it as well. In the end it gives a mixed feeling, you little slut! *grins* I'm just kidding. Very well written.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Lostinbeer | [ Reply to This ]



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