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    dots Submission Name: Smilesdots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 755
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       alright this one i think most of you will find interesting.. it is just some thoughts i was having.. hope you can enjoy it and maybe get something out of it..

    i went ahead and wrote it because of a suggestion by a friend.. i'll hope for the best.. lol don't bash it to much.. i just want to know what you think..
    Adam


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    dotsSmilesdots
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    Every moment of a truly worthwhile life feeds on one thing....
    Knowing you can make another smile,
    Knowing that even for an instant they are happy
    And that somehow you made them that way..

    Whether it be from a child you have never even known,
    A friend that is hurting,
    From someone you care for the most...
    Or just to make someone's day better..

    Knowing and believing that you can bring abou that one single expression,
    It makes the world seem somehow worthwhile..

    The meaning behind it is beyond words most times..
    One smile lets us know you care..
    Sometimes it's I love you.. sometimes it's even shut up..
    But most times it is simply thank you....
    Their is truly no greater reward than that one instant.

    And so, for those that would try to make another smile,
    I say the world owes you a debt of gratitude..
    One that would be impossible to ever repay.

    Though for us that know,
    Their is no greater reward,
    Greater than that eternal moment..




    Submitted on 2004-11-17 18:31:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2005-03-09 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to say, slightly sappy like cotton candy...
    don't mind me, i'm being silly...
    i think some of it is well done, emotional; feels like a true connection. the rest seems like bs. i think this could use some more rewriting.
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by dreamexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      abou...left off your t and their should be there...

    Other than that, this poem was really good, though not really my scene. I a bit of a pessimist at heart...making ppl smile, pssht...I dont like it. Id rather smile at other ppl and watch their look of terror at seeing my fanged smile...muhahahaha...lol;)

    ->Dark
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]


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