Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Future Chaos Ch.1~The fearlessdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 325
    Class/Type: Story/
    Total Views: 1144
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2016



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFuture Chaos Ch.1~The fearlessdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The Micro-chip life function! The last concluding puzzle piece, the stiched digi-tech breath of life; was implanted in my once alive but now a cyborg creature, of artificial consciousness. The creature of my long awaited experimentation,how i've longed for this since the chaotic tragic, surface defamated wave of darkness.

    ~[Mental space-out]

    From when i graduated from the university of Tawang, in Tokyo Japan; a strong prediction was of certain trust, this, since the 21st century was of the human-robotic intelligence formation assured. The world of newer animated mechanism concentrated life worth functions,. a new wave of data programation.To no availability! Ofcourse a statement only NASA could of made, and a science guaranteed, would be accomplished and perfected by the decade late to come. It never came, as even the most advanced technology could not remaster the tactic points of human action. Now today, 56 years in the making.....not a fraction of a 10% level could conclude this process, way before the war destroys us! A once popular saying quakes inside, as the saying "three times is (THE) charm", and today i'm left without an ounce of faith for all mankind. World War three [3], and no one saw it coming, but how it's come to change everything.

    ~[gaining consciouness]

    Now, my sweet experimentaional doll! What should be the proper name for such a woman? For Sarah and her soul now rest in peace, oh... how i've missed her. I can't adandon such a woman's structure,no! Not when solitude resides at every corner of my sanity, not when years of years are soon to be expectedly, the death of me. In subterranean tragedy, with a thought of reality, imagine only it was not, but just a fantasy. Release me!!! With all the power in the cave, i call for you. "Arise....teenage frankenstein,. Arise"!!
    . [to be continued..........] By: Damien Vladimir 09 ~(04)





    Submitted on 2004-11-17 21:07:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      wow, got a little mad scientist thing going on over here. I'm not sure I am following the specifics of this story, I think the format is making it hard. I know this site isn't really set up for stories though, so I'm not sure who's fault it is. I am looking forward to reading the rest though.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks! Well this is simply just the beginning. As chapter two is read, you'll get a clearer picture. Consider this as i have. A puzzle! The point was to get readers hooked and arise curiousity of what's this tale's all about. Next week you'll get chp.2, or if i really i get a strong response; three days. the story is about WW3...And an underground refuge for one a man&woman only.[the woman dead]. Surface contanimation lead to this. Glad to hear you liked and enjoyed, await the next chapter. Thanks again.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    33191

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry