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    dots Submission Name: Genetically Engineered Iguanasdots
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    Author: secret moon
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 687/427/57
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Prose/Me
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       Just something that came to mind. . . it probably sucks but there it is. . . let it shine light into the darkness of your day.


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    I wish the sky were purple, and that instead of dogs and cats people kept huge, genetically engineered iguanas for pets. And maybe if that happened, then maybe there would be these enormous factories in every town where instead of churning out textiles and smokes, they churned out doughnuts and chocolate and all sorts of lovely sweet things that never, ever make you fat – and of course, there would be no smoke. Just synthetic butterflies that are environmentally safe, and don’t pollute the rivers when they eventually dissolve. Then, as any reasonable thought pattern would follow, there would be no formal school either; kids would hang out in these great big amphitheaters where they played rock music so loud that it never hurt your ears, and teenagers would actually take trips to Africa and Venice and Lithuania to learn about cultures instead of memorizing endless facts out of boring history books. Starbuck’s would give out coffee to everybody for free, McDonald’s wouldn’t change the ingredients in their grease and make their fries taste weird, and everything would be wonderful.

    (Perhaps you would love me then.)
    (But then again, probably not.)




    Submitted on 2004-11-17 21:18:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is crazay. it makes me want to picture myself on a boat on a river with cellophane trees and marmalade skies....... (did i get that right?) lol aaahhh i like butterflies..... a great deal, actually. My ex has an iguana named General and he's a massachist..... he's evil. IT's scary.
    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by SoulHathBled | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, how beautiful... Sounds vaguely like it should be the topic of a Shania Twain song. I so should not know that. Anyway, can't find a thing wrong with it, so this is really a useless comment. Thanks for posting this!
    ~me
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by whiteknight | [ Reply to This ]
      didn't see the end coming at all! this was quite different and unique. what's with the iguanas? don't you like cats and dogs? lol! just kidding. this was definitely interesting and a bit thought provoking, i must say.
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      You caught me so completely off guard at teh end I would like to stand here now and g iev you a round of applause. Great little piece of prose. Every idea behind this was as interesting to read as the first, especially the part about Iguanas. Fun piece to read, especially with the twist, this is going to my favorite collection:O) (O:
    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved it- oh-yeah! That punture wound at the end. The fear and loathingness of it all. Perfect.
    Peace, love and dead cats,
    ~#6-
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think this suck very creative. It's got this acid trip willy wonka theme going on. personally a world like this would be interesting.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a fan of twisty poetry, and I didn't see that little jab coming at the end. During the beginning of this poem, I had no idea what this was getting to. Nice thoughts on a perfect world though.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, changing the world for someone, but not knowing it will ever make a difference. I liked the way you made everything seem so great at first, but there always seem to be an underlying sence of pain, because with all the goodness, it willl always be lost in the end.

    I love the changing, and the way this was written, I applaude you most extensivly, Even in the first line:

    I wish the sky were purple

    this seems to call the reader, and lets the reader think, what happens if the sky were purple, how would the light in our lives be reflected differently, would the world see things more clearly, would people love or hate. This line opens a whole world of thoughts and theories, and leads most successivly into your writting.

    Thankyou so much for posting, it is refreshing to see some unique work.
    much love
    kaity
    | Posted on 2004-11-27 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. The whole idea about this place that everything seems perfect just came alive for me. At least your desire for it did. Very whimsical and sweeping, until the cold hard reality at the end.

    I guess what they say is true: What goes up must come down.


    Sorry about that.

    Nice write,
    clever.

    peace,
    mister fizzle
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that's very interesting but it makes you think. We must have simillar views on school and possibly society because I do relate to this extremely well ;)
    | Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Inkybro | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahahahah. If only the world was like that. That would be so wonderful, full of fun and actual learning. Because lets face it, school is just busy work. Damn, now I really want a genetically engineered iguana. LIke badly.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]


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