a servant to the night or to insanity...? maybe night is insanity...? i dont know... i think the thee in the i curse thee for seeking them line is kinda outta place with the whole feel of the rest of the poem... especially when the line after you refer to whatever as you... maybe you might wanna change it...? only if you wanna though coz i guess its your groove. this poem feels very sharp but its kinda hazy too like a cloud has crossed my vision or something... like i can almost grasp what you are getting at but then i fail again... this is a very cool write
This line takes away from the whole poem. The poem in and of itself is good, but this poem adds a "fantasy" aspect that is kind of tacky, and really below the standard of writing that this is at. Try changing that line, and then update.