Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: A heart in Truthdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: frank bazaya
    ASL Info:    24/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 10/12/5
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 316
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1169



    Description:
       anyone can basically say whatever they want to say as long as its honest and coming straight from the heart. because i basically wrote this the day i had to leave the one girl who has truly shown me what it is to love someone. the day i had to let her go and knwo that i wouldnt have her in my arms for a while. i was filled with emotion, and all i could think about was about all that she meant to me and how special i thought she was, as a result this is the poem that came out of me...just my heart in truth. and hopefully if the girl ever gets a chance to read this, i want her to know I LOVE HER..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsA heart in Truthdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Even though i'll be gone
    ...dont you fret,
    our bond will still be strong.
    its to you i belong,
    for you i'll dedicate my song.

    personify my affection,
    for anyone who will pay attention.
    dare i mention....
    the passion in your eyes,
    something like the sunrise.
    let who will despise,
    but our love will soar and glide.
    hold my hand and lets ride the tide
    far and beyond, to where stars collide.

    you heart...so pure and simple,
    to me truly one of Gods people.
    At times the thought un-nerving,
    but in your essence...
    its happiness your deserving.
    something so special,
    someone so real...
    given the gift to feel,
    blessed with the ability to heal.

    This is my proclomation,
    just give me a second...
    i'll show you the sweetest sensation,
    a chill down your spine,
    your bodys vibration,
    dont conceal your desire...
    let me set your body on fire.
    let minds be at rest
    my heart is in truth




    Submitted on 2004-11-18 09:21:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Very heartfelt poem and the pattern is easy to read with however if you really love her why let her go. Was it better for her or I don't know, and if you loved her so much and didn't want to let her go you don't seem to be bitter or angry. You don't always have to be but most are if they had to do something so painful. Pretty good.
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by The Black Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      Welcome to Elites, and I think you have more than accomplished a great starting piece. I know the feeling of leaving someone you love, and it hurts but at the end of the day, live keeps on living so you've just got to go down a new path, if she is truly gone. I confess, even I can't do that, but it's advise I've been given many a time.
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite lovely. but, why did you leave this person? i didn't sense any anger. i found that curious. had you already conceded to leaving her? it must have been out of your hands.
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by soadman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh hey ykno thas nice. Love in bloom is a beautiful thing, and most people on write about love when the bloom has withered and died. Its a shame you had to leave her somewhere - I've not yet found how to sucessfully do that. Sounds like you have tho. Good luck with that.
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.