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tell me what to do


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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tell me what to do



He said:
Tell me what to do.
Show me. Guide me.
I’ll provide the friction for your satisfaction.
If I have direction with
simplification.

She replies:
Seduce me. Reduce me.
Introduce me to a
feeling so profuse,
that I let loose
a flow of juice, and
I am reduced to
One moment.




Submitted on 2004-11-18 10:02:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  reading this and i may be wrong...but at least on the girl's reply i thought about an ograsm..

Seduce me. Reduce me

to One moment.

well i really like this a lot...i think it is very ture...poeple want to be used and lead...and led and use...it is the way most of us work.

this is also very funny i think...kinda made me smile...i like this a lot
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like the rhyming in this poem,with a light understone of sensuality to it. So far this is my favor poem I have read of yours.
| Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Very
very
very cool!
I love the use of imagery and the way you weaved your words.
I'm looking forward to
more of your works.

Love

Wynne
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Wynne Devereaux | [ Reply to This ]
  The rhyming made this a lighthearted view on a not-so lighthearted subject. Almost limerick-like... I enjoyed it great deal.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]


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