How about a sequel to this? You could call it . . .
Hahhahahaa. Oh, my, I kill myself. But hey man, sex sells!
But seriously, a nice little ditty on the oftimes sh itty sh it we say to one another and how it all snowballs and comes back at us and if I've learned anything . . . winning an argument is impossible. You never win. And nothing is worth chewing on the one you love. You can think you've won, but the damage done to win, well . . . need I say more?
It's too bad that women can be gold-diggers, and then it's apparent that you've dated some that could make a sailor blush. I've seen that attitude too, always ready to dig their nails in a cat scratch fever. I like the image you've drawn from the title, the attempt you're making at warning, but you can't make any promises. That's just reality, and karma is karma, nice device to show us ...boomerang. It's a good write, thanks for sharing. nansofast
Cool! A rubber heart, to protect and absorb, washing away "greed?". What is meant by this line? Is she too demanding? It's your only mention of "greed" and I'm just uncertain as to it's usage. I loved your rhyme scheme. I think it is perfect for this piece. Overall a well constructed and unusaual poem, vary entertaining.
It's almost as if you're saying that the heart serves as something that attracts (perfume) and deflects (mud flaps)...very interesting image. Creates the feeling of being torn between wanting to enitice and shield...and yep those words will come back to her just like the boomerang...they always do. Another great write!
It didn't seem dirrected at anyone particular; many possibilities. i just think it's funny hope some people(mostly older; my dad's one of them,) Will say a word like Feraling instead of saying [censored]. It make know sense their intent is the same. Karmatic reward is the same so why not just go the extra bit and say what the feel? I like the title and detail. Mudflaps reminds me of the ones on truckers semi-trailors. The naked women in silver or white, my first thoughts. I like you concise yet detailed style. peace