Break Me
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I dated a guy for a few years, and this is how I feared it would turn out. Unfortunately, I was right. He did break me.
Break Me
Your naivety astounds me You know so little but you love so much It's charming, really I know you'll break me eventually Drop me, like any other man would But right now all I ask Is that you harbor my weary heart in the blissful twilight of your soul We'll dance together in tender synchronicity Until you grow restless and long for the beat of some Jezebel's drum And you'll retreat into your simple oblivion with innocence as your shield And I'll emerge Not better or worse off for having loved you Just a little more weathered and equally lonesome. |
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wow, this is a great poem, it was deep and intellectual. ive been in this place before, and this description is right ontop of the line, i don't have any critiques about this poem- or tha ti can think of at this moment for it is a great poem.  | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ] | I like this one, not your typical heartbreak poem, but one that really portrays the reality of it being a series of great moments and then a sudden seemingly inevitable drifting apart. Believe me, I've been there, and it really hurt. I think you portrayed that really well. | | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by srcastic1 | [ Reply to This ] | i really like this, it has a depressing truth in it, it had my attention through the whole poem, grrt write, it made me want to read more..keep it up! | | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by poetsoul | [ Reply to This ] | Well written. A said story really, inevitable release from fulfillment. I thought you articulated your thoughts in this piece beautifully, although I think you lose your inoncence when you love another, but if im wrong, please tell me. Overall this poem was very well written, and I look foward to reading more of your poetry, thank you for sharing, keep writing and take care. | | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by matt73 | [ Reply to This ] | Nice piece. Isn't it amazing how we always know when we're going to get hurt, yet we let ourselves do it anyway? I'm the same way. I really liked the line, "...until you grow restless and long for the beat of some Jezebel's drum." | -brandy | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by w0rdz_0f_wizd0m | [ Reply to This ] | |
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