Well written, a good grasp of rhyme and meter for certain. Diction is period from a bygone time, but probably intentional. The message is interesting, really just a hint of bawdy, enough to get Pete going anyway! Nice work, Dave
Maybe this piece could be called wordy, but you seem to have a balance between the lines, and the rhyme came off well. I particularly like: "Sharing whispers with those that might, Intoning ditties of deeds undone. Chancing encounter with those in flight Enchanting pleasures to be begun." I agree its hard to tell the meaning; seems like this lady has brought about some mixed feelings; weak and fallen from grace, yet greatly desired. Kinda confuserating. :blink; But overall, a good not-too-wordy read. :D
It's not that wordy. Some times i'm affraid to put anything over eighty words of poem on this site lest someone not read it. Your poem for the most part flowed with ease to read and I dont think the meaning was lost on me. Good poem.
Submission Name: Harbinger of Delight
