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    dots Submission Name: The Necklacedots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Alright so this probably sucks.. that's alright i didn't spend alot of time on it.. just trying to write down a memory.. ha me and my outlets.. well have fun with and feel free to comment.. i'll probably rework it a great deal..
    Adam


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    dotsThe Necklacedots
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    Two twin pieces of silver bound by an old chain..
    Nothing special, maybe worth the whole of five dollars..

    Bound by my own hand for no real reason..
    Only that I considered wearing it for awhile..
    Only that it seemed to call to me..

    It was bound around my neck for years..
    The desire to remove it merely eluded me..
    I suppose I had grown attached to it..
    It felt like a part of me..

    And so you ask. Do I still bear these twins about me?.
    Only one remains..
    The other is held by another..
    Another who wished for a piece of me near her..

    I gave it as a gift.. A symbol of me..
    A symbol of my love..
    A piece of my heart and soul to bear..
    All she desired....




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    | Posted on 2005-03-09 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      well...great symbolism...ive done that once...its kinda sweet, that you would give her something so close to you, to show your love and all...well...cant really comment anymore on the love aspect of it...kinda dont believe in it anymore...but, for what its worth...im glad that you found your *significant other*...thats great, most of us only dream of such...oh well, great work:)

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    | Posted on 2004-11-22 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess this means a little more to me then every or anyone else who reads it. It still hangs around my neck, it has from the day it arrived in the mail. the ring is on hanging on my wall by a keychain. my mom wants me to send them back. Tell me what you want me to do. I have always worn this necklace. it was a part of you now its a part of me.

    Kera~~Jesse
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the meaning behind the poem. It wa quite simple, but you wrote it as something much more than simple, which I feel added more meaning to it!

    Oh. I don't chat too much, but you can email me if you're bored sometimes: metal_chick7@mailpuppy.com
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by melancholymaid | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the whole personel value overcoming the monitary. And the giving of something you hold dear to another, nice touch to conclude the poem. And by the way the poem does'nt suck.
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]


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