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    dots Submission Name: Tumbling Heartachedots
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    Author: TeddyD
    ASL Info:    44/M/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 83/121/28
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 865
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    Bytes: 614



    Description:
       To my Lady..... telling her, no matter what-- I'll always love her!


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    dotsTumbling Heartachedots
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    Tumbling Heartache


    My heartache is screaming,
    Being cut by your knife
    A heart beating so proudly,
    Now attacked by such strife


    Thereís nowhere to run now,
    And no place to hide
    It just lies there broken,
    Near the top of the slide


    Keeps tumbling downward,
    While spewing its ware
    Still grasping my love,
    And the deepest of cares


    My heartbreak still screaming,
    From pain fresh and new
    My wounds are horrific,
    But Iíll always love you!




    Submitted on 2004-11-19 10:47:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very strong use of the heart tumbling down the slide, really created a vivid image in my head. but i was a little shocked at the end when you still loved the person. i mean in reality i understand it, but it didn't seem like it fit with the poem. just a thought.
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by soadman | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that once you have loved someone, no matter what they do to you, you will always still have some kind of love for them. This piece hits it right on the nose. They can walk all over you and you will still be there through it all.
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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