Description: Inspired by a course done for work in which we did some personality typing work, this word was one of the ones a friend chose to describe herself, and describe her well it does indeed. So this is for Pam, whom inspired me.
This is lovely. I'd delete the full stops. "Scent the air/of change/around you." I can't work out if the "of" is the right word here or not, or if it's "scent" that's confusing me. I think it's the of. Because you don't "scent of", you "smell of" or "scent with". Hmm. But this is really lovely. Talented writer.
this even has a very nice flow to it, easier to follow then "passionate" i loved the play on the words perception and conception, gave me a feeling of finality after the last line, a bold statement "freedom inthought an action" I like
Too often we get bogged down in the stale air of intransigence. Oh, for the fresh "air of change". Would someone please "Breathe out conception"? Let's have some new ideas, please! In most jobs, not necessarily lives, that is how it is, let's keep doing it the same old way. Your poem's concept would be an excellent creed for all managers. Great Idea!
This descibes creativity to a T. I feel the pondering, the joy of creating, Looking for inspiration, saying or doing what your mind has created, and feeling satisfied at having created something unique. Well thats how it worked to relate to me. Loved it. Like the breathe lines they can work two ways depending on how they are said.
if it was longer it would be better i feel like u didnt desribe enough and it was kind of choppy. i hate when people say that but its true. it can be good advise i suppose, this poem doesnt suggest much of a main idea
Submission Name: Holistic
