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    dots Submission Name: That nightdots

    Author: Star_searcher
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 114/109/20
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I don't really think this is a great poem, I just needed to write about it.

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    dotsThat nightdots

    Have you ever lay so close to someone yet been so far apart?

    That night we lay together,
    Holding each other so tight,
    Yet knowing it didn't mean the same.

    As you stroked my hair,
    I got the same butterflies I did before.
    But as I respond,
    I know we're not the same.

    We talked for a while,
    There's still a lot of feeling.
    Just not the ones there were before.

    And you don't know this
    But while you slept I watched over you,
    Told you everything I felt,
    And it was a perfect sight.

    Submitted on 2004-11-20 09:40:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well written although a few cliché's might have been sprnkled throughout it, i definitely couldn't write something like this. Very well done!
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it because its a contrast to the dark poetry most people write. Many people write very dark poetry but I like this one. Thats for sharing it and I am happy for your love.

    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      seeing such happy memories being poured into words it's what makes writing so wonderful.. it is clear that you have been very happy and love someone a great deal.. i hope that feeling stays with you.. because it is rare.. i hope the best for you..
    Oh yeah and this is very good..
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]

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