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    dots Submission Name: For A Momentdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFor A Momentdots
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    For a moment the wind
    made the elm leaf come alive
    like some odd-limbed animal
    gliding across the lawn
    until the wind blew harder
    and turned the leaf over
    shattering the illusion.




    Submitted on 2004-03-16 21:10:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh my god, this is sosososo beautiful. the imagery and....I wouldnt change anything about it.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooh, nice. I got completely freaked just yesterday because a teeny puff of wind tossed a leaf against the back of my bare leg. Amazing the little things that grab at the creative process... Very, very cool. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I see a deeper message in here... maybe I am reading too deeply... but I see the leaf as a metaphor for a person, and the underside of the leaf, maybe, their ugly inner self destroying everything you thought you knew? I dont know... but thats a good thing that I can grab whatever I want from your writes and not be wrong... keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-17 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy nice little vignette of imagery... doesn't seem quite finished though perhaps one more line?? almost a that was pretty but what was the point... of course that could just be because we expect even nature to have "a point". jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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