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    dots Submission Name: The Rosedots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Yes, I overcame the after effects of the clichéd wicked stepmother...yay me!


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    dotsThe Rosedots
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    I was a seed;
    Like any other.
    I grew so far
    until my mother
    died.

    And then she came

    A shining hope,
    Like rays of the sun;
    But the choking nature of a weed.
    A dandy lion!

    She roared and I wilted.

    My thirst for nurture
    not fulfilled by her nature.

    My heart
    delicate petals
    refused to bloom

    and yet refused to die.

    Cornered in my stony bed
    strength stemmed from the ugliness
    she had put in my head
    and I gathered my defence.

    A thorny protection
    scratching back at her rejection
    I rose up.

    And she wilted.

    I am a beautiful rose
    shedding my defence
    I blossomed.




    Submitted on 2004-11-20 13:43:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The strength of the world doesn't lie in doormats. there are no door mats in this poem, either. You took the chance to rise above and willingly, the powers of creation have made you a poet. Welcome to a beautiful life. best, nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-11-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. I'm glad you overcame the affects! It's neat the way you wrote about the whole process, not just a part of it, i.e only having the first half. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2004-11-20 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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