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    dots Submission Name: Sensitivedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 896
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       This just came to me. I have no idea what to think of it.


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    dotsSensitivedots
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    Sensitive--
    I suppose that I am.
    It's nothing I cultivate,
    but my psyche is like
    asponge from a multipack
    from the clearance bin
    at an "anything for a dollar" store
    that has been wet and dried
    and scrubbed across concrete
    until it nearly disintegrates,
    but I'm not really a sponge.
    I fall apart, but I stay together.
    Maybe, I am wrong:
    I soak up all I see,
    and perhaps I'm stronger than I think.
    I crack yet stay intact
    as you rub me across sandpaper,
    and I'll absorb still more after you toss me aside.





    Submitted on 2004-03-16 22:31:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is such a good poem, nice read, wouldnt change a thing about it, hits clse to home and definitely a fave!!!
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this one very much. sounds a little too familiar, like "that's me!" "a sponge from the multipack from the clearance bin" is great! what a great write! being sensitive is a [censored] sometimes, but then again, is that what makes us writers?!
    | Posted on 2004-03-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhhhh a work of art... a menu at a metaphor restaurant... got hungry thinking about what a great helping you have served up on this great platter... excellent message and imagery
    | Posted on 2004-03-17 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, that's the first time I did that. We're allowed one mess up every so often.
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      uh... did you notice that the description and the poem are interchanged? ... anyways, it was okay... i dunno but there's something missing...
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by MzJae | [ Reply to This ]


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