i like it, it feels like a snippet heard on the radio, I think it would be cool if you put this with similar pieces in content but different styles. and what's up with your journal? :P not everybody hates you..cheer up:P
He left you. He never really wanted you, anyway. You thought you loved him. you thought he loved you. Don't look back.
He died, today. You were in love were going to run away. Don't look back.
First, I'd classify this as "lyrics."
Second, I would either add complete punctuation or no punctuation at all. Lyrics, in my opinion, aren't always improved with it; but I think poetry needs it. So decide what you want this to be.
It's a half-way decent start. Give me a message sometime when you add some more to it. I'd like to see what it turns into. ;)
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